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Independent Peer Revision

This was the guidelines that Al and I used to peer edit each others papers. We used this because we both felt that It helped organize what we should be doing for peer editing instead of just free lancing over each others papers. The only place I wish I had more feedback was I did like having the two reviewers because both had insightful comments and usually they would focus on 2 completely different sections of my paper.

In class we took a more general focus on peer review and looked at some surface level things like word choice an MLA. I had the same partner, Al, and it did help us. Since critiquing others is much easier both of us were able to take a good look into each others papers. Even with something as simple as MLA having another set of eyes to make sure that it is correct is very helpful.

Big Data Source Collection

For this source, I looked over the entire thing and highlighted anything I thought would be useful for my argument. I did not do any text to self connections as this paper we are moving away from connections to self.

I did the same things as before but really focused on finding quotes to back up my argument.

This source was different then a lot of others because it was more of a list with a small piece of text describing the incident. I used a mix of chunking to group all of the common things together and then I used active reading to better understand and relate everything back to my main argument.

Data Collection

Using our devices every day we never really take the time to fully understand what they’re doing. We assume that when we see and ad about something we just talked it’s just a coincidence.

Looking more into it, it is listening to everything that we’re doing, and taking that and finding advertisements we might like. It is also remembering everything that we are doing.

Progress

The learning outcome I was able to better understand was #2: Be able to integrate their ideas with those of others using summary, paraphrase, quotation, analysis, and synthesis of relevant sources. 

Using all 3 sources, Greenfield, Twenge, and boyd, I had a lot of practice intergrating their quotes into my paper. Also, a few times I didn’t want to use the entire quote so I just paraphrased the information.

Alone, Does He Even Remember Me?

I sit all day long, alone in this small room. I think he even put a picture frame on top of me. Every day after school we would sit and play games together all night long. And before we went to bed we would put our favorite movie on and fall asleep.

Now in college apparently there is “no time” or anything, all I hear all day and night long is ‘Friends’ paying on repeat. There’s never anything fun to do, it’s just work, work and more work. Hopefully this summer things will go back to the way they used to be.

When this summer comes we can stay up all night long and play our favorite games, and when we go to bed we can try watching a new show we haven’t seen yet. Besides all that, while you are at work I will actually be turned off, resting, instead of trying to fill the empty void to make this place seem more like home.

MLA & Surface Level Revision

Looking at my papers from the last time to now I really wanted to focus on fixing my comma splice issues. Last paper I had a lot of run on sentences and this time around I looked deeper into my paper to make sure that I separated my sentences better with commas. As well I tried to focus on making sure each sentence had a complete thought to it instead of having fragmented sentences. Another thing that I worked on was integrating my quotes better and properly citing using MLA format.

Greenfield Text

I liked the active reading strategy a lot more than chunking everything. I used color coding and one major pro was everything was color coded and easily organized. Some cons that I found with this was time, I’m not sure why exactly but It took me a very long time to get all of this done.

TREAC Paragraph

[TOPIC] Smartphones are a very large part of everyday life, you could even say that my generation, Gen I, cant even live without them. While these phones are a staple of everyday life I still would not go as far to say that they have destroyed our generation. [RESTRICTION] JEAN M. Twenge and her article that was posted into the Alantic seems to cover the more extremes as we talked about it as a class and none of us had experienced the same things. [EVIDENCE] In her article Twenge talks a lot about how kids are no longer doing the same stuff as previous generations like drinking and smoking. This seemed to be a pretty big piece of evidence and it is almost a counter example of how cellphones have not ruined our generation. [ANALYSIS] Using this example it seems to discredit the article because she says it almost like teens not drinking and smoking so much is a bad thing. [CONCLUSION] Overall I think that this evidence needs to just be reexamined so it fits with the more current trends.

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